Date: 31 Oct 2008 12:43 PM Title: Mission : Search and Seizure
"Tick, tick, tick asshole."
"Hey 494, I'm running out of ways to say stole."
"511 worked to expand our relationship with the Canadian Military."
I love your writing; you have the best lines. The whole mission series was great. You've done an amazing job providing an in depth look into the development of 494 and 511 both as individual characters and their relationship. The appearance of Zane was a nice little twist, that I totally didn't see coming. I was a little disappointed that he decided to high tail it out of there rather than help his fellow transgens out, but I guess I can understand that when you've done nothing but run your whole life that's just your automatic reaction. I would be interested to see a future fic where Zane makes his way to Terminal City and Max figures out that he and Alec knew each other before. The fallout from that would be interesting to read.
As always, thanks for writing.
[Report This]Date: 24 Nov 2007 08:40 AM Title: Mission : Search and Seizure
This story works like long, slow, teasing sex. The tension builds and builds while the characters are forced to wait, until you're ready to scream with frustration. When they finally get to act, it's orgasmically satisfying. I practically chortled with glee through every one of 511's action snippets.
Somewhere in the midst of all the waiting, I fell in love with 529; I suppose it must have been during one of his brief stints of conciousness.
Oh, the snarking! The battle critiquing! The overturned table! The tank! The spyplay-skulldudgery-backstabbiness of it all! The "aquisition" of so many things, at every opportunity!
I love the clear example of 494's tit-for-tat strategy for winning allies. The trust, carefully measured against tiny clues, then doled out in such a way as to provoke just the right amount of help, just when needed.
Poor guy, though: continually plagued by the cage and the Andy in their many and varied forms.
[Report This]Date: 24 Nov 2007 07:59 AM Title: Mission: Seek and Destroy
Oh, I had fun reading this one. The action is exciting and clearly described, the spyplay is tricksey and well supported, the camaraderie and fun dialogue among the X5s make a marvelous counterpoint for the uneasy awareness that 494's paint job doesn't quite suit his architecture, and the writing and pacing make for a smooth, easy read.
Nice use of canon for the bioweaponry. Nice reuse of the lovely original character from Hostile Territory. Lovely frustrating of bosses and flouting of regs and orders many and sundry.
Best. Lola. Ever. (Okay, so I've only read one other, but I simply can't imagine a better. I accept that this is my limiting belief.)
[Report This]Date: 24 Nov 2007 06:09 AM Title: Hostile Territory
An enjoyable little sneak-and-destroy action story that kept me entertained throughout. Then I had a think about it, and realised that the story very sneakily delivers a creep factor: I was so amused by little 494's teasing and irreverant attitude and his game of freak-the-ordinary that I was totally distracted from the sheer ooky horror of pre-adolescents in combat. How cool is that? *Shivers.*
Andrews is a beautiful creation: competent, good-humoured, and pragmatically flappable. I enjoyed the image of the kids hauling him around. Nice, not-so-simple intro to the kinds of headgames Lydecker plays in this series -- and boy am I glad 494 is there to think them through for me. Exposition of 494's apart-ness is particularly well done: briefly stated, then proven again and again in word and deed. I loved him stepping up at the crux, and the way that shook down through the other kids.