[Report This]Date: 16 Feb 2012 01:34 PM Title: The Battle For Supremacy
I can't stop thinking about this piece.
Is it because
a. I love Ames White?
b. I love drummers?
c. the writing is just so amazing...
d. all of the above
Seriously, this piece is awesome and I have it bookmarked for future rereads. Thanks for posting :D
[Report This]Date: 31 Oct 2010 11:52 PM Title: The Battle For Supremacy
Oi, oi, that didn't sound like the dream improved White's mood any - possibly much to Otto's discomfort later on. ;-)
The idea of the "Battle of the Bands" was lovely and somehow I can really picture Ames singing, mesmerizing the audience. *blush* He's so passionate about the Familiars and Transgenics that it's not too hard an image to see him lose himself in music.
The part with him losing his son (here to the other team) though was very sad, Skylar. The whole paragraph was designed (and well so, I might add) to show his grief and frustrated anger over the matter.
The behind-the-scenes bit with backstory and 'band politics' made me smirk the most - only the bit with White flooring himself face-first in the end topped that off.
Yet, how in all good heavens could you have Zack killed?! :o
Still, I've got one tiny sugestion for you. In the second paragraph where it says "White remembered when his son used to constantly wear a black shirt", I would have prefered you calling him Ames instead of by his last name, because IMHO it was such an emotional moment for him, both the memory and seeing Ray during his performance, that it would have taken the reader closer to his character (and therefore also him closer to his son).
Author's Response: Thanks mate! I never turn down concrit - I love it in fact. And you're right, it would have worked better so I've changed it. I actually tossed 'Ames' and 'White' around a few times in the fic because I figured he probably wouldn't refer to himself by his surname :P Tossed it around so much that I gave up in the end and went with what I knew. Might go back and change them all... Anyway, I'm glad you liked it! And I'm sorry I killed off Zack :P I couldn't think of any believable reason for him leaving the band and forgetting all about them and saying the lead singer sent him out to pasture on a farm didn't really seem like the right way to go :P
Date: 31 Oct 2010 09:29 PM Title: The Battle For Supremacy
Very interesting. Original, clever and I love the concept of it. Hell, this could've been a series and I would've loved it.
Author's Response: *shudders* A series? It took me so long to write this... I had the idea, I even dreamt about it but for some reason I just couldn't write it. But desperation to enter this challenge won out in the end! Hmmm, maybe I work better under pressure?! :P
Date: 16 Oct 2010 02:18 AM Title: The Battle For Supremacy
that's awesome! dreamland! lol
(and white officially scares me. he's so...weird...)
Author's Response: I know! I'm not exactly White's biggest fan and I seem to like him more in the series than in most of the fics I've read but I thought I'd try my hand at writing him. If nothing else, it was a cathartic way of exploring the character that I dislike so much :P
[Report This]Date: 13 Oct 2010 10:18 AM Title: The Battle For Supremacy
You said you were going to do it and you did. You turned White into a rocker. Or just musician/artist. Huh. *laughs* Poor guy can't even catch a break in his dreams... :D Nice work, hon!
Author's Response: I said that I would do it and indeed I did! :P Thanks mate :D