Date: 21 Mar 2015 12:59 PM Title: Chapter 3
Waaaah! Where's the rest??? The characterisation is so poignantly plausible that totally teared up. Please continue this story!
Date: 28 May 2013 09:40 PM Title: Chapter 1
I know it's been a while but could you please update this story!! I've read it on fanfiction and it just can't end like that! I love your writing and where this story was going. Definitely one of my favourites.
[Report This]Date: 22 Nov 2010 12:48 AM Title: Chapter 1
this is awesome. and needed stars.
i like stars.
your epicness deserves them.
Date: 17 Sep 2010 04:37 AM Title: Chapter 3
I just stumbled on this story, and I'm so glad I did! It's such a wonderful blend of clueless!Alec and season 1 Max. It's lots of fun, and I'm looking forward to reading more. It's awesome that you're writing DA again!
Date: 16 Aug 2010 11:59 PM Title: Chapter 1
Just wanted to add that I'm impressed with how well written this story is. I've enjoyed all of your stories that I've read but this one definitely stands out. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: I really appreciate that. I've worked really hard to make it better, so thank you very much for coming back to make the mention. Many thanks!!
Date: 16 Aug 2010 10:53 PM Title: Chapter 3
Sweet! Loving it so far and look forward to more.
Author's Response: Aww, thank you so much!
Date: 06 Aug 2010 11:45 AM Title: Chapter 3
Well,
I Gotta say that Jewel was right to push you to post this story, you got me hooked ;)
I can't wait to know how he's going to react when he'll see Max again after such a long absence ^^
Keep Going !!!!
Hope to read from you soon
Author's Response: Aww, thank you! How nice of you to say! I'm so enjoying writing it, I can't even tell you. I'm going, I promise! It's so exciting that you're wondering about the exact things that I'm super pumped for too. Thanks again! ~scar
Date: 02 Aug 2010 03:14 PM Title: Chapter 3
Interesting chapter. Of course, them being them - and no matter how or when they meet - there'd have to be the fighting and misunderstanding. So much a part of their relationship.
I am really liking how careful they are with each other regarding the fact that they are transgenics. It's really amusing and good writing.
|“Tall. At least six feet. Fit. Total pretty boy but in the good way.” Max couldn’t even think of how to do justice in explaining Alec’s face. “His eyes are all like vulnerable and whatever. This greenish brown color.” | Hee! Of course she'd have trouble doing justice to his looks. Seriously. The guy is.. well. Alec.
More!! :D
Author's Response: Thanks, hon!! For like, a nanosecond, I considered having them get along and my brain said pfffffffffffffft. It would be like removing the essence of what makes them them, which is also what makes them so awesome. I think part of *her* having trouble doing justice to his looks is just that *I* can't. Much appreciated!
Date: 02 Aug 2010 01:29 AM Title: Chapter 3
I had a total "squee!" moment when I saw the update.
I love this. Have I told you that I love this? I do. Totally.
Their thoughts on each other being average humans with all their weaknesses and flaws, the action, the banter. Love that Max got all banged up, Alec was the one who shelled out the green, Max being all dependant on the goodwill of others *laughs* Fun times!
Particularly liked Alec's headspace. Poor guy feeling lost when his name privs were revoked *pets him* and I always want to cry when he talks to Rachel.
I may not be her biggest fan (didn't particularly care about her further than her being a huge part of the reason Alec grew from soldier to man with a heart) but I almost thought she was forgotten in this chapter until you finally mentioned her. Thought I'd whine at you on her behalf :P
Another great installment. I'm already itching for the next one *scratch, scratch* Hurry up, yeah? I'm getting all splotchy...
Author's Response: YAY! Thank you!! I'm so excited that you're loving it! I kind of agree with you on Rachel, I feel she was more of a device than a person in away during the show. Obviously, this story is (so far) not treating her a lot better since she's like, incapable of speech, but I haven't forgotten her. Neither has Alec. He definitely deserves the petting, poor guy.
Date: 24 Jul 2010 12:54 PM Title: Chapter 2
*I'mma rockin' back 'n forth on my ickle heelies in anxious anticipation*
Author's Response: YAY!!! Makes me want to rush off and write more! I love that feeling, so thank you!!
Date: 24 Jul 2010 12:45 PM Title: Chapter 2
|Alec pushed past her quickly, but couldn't help wondering... What was a hand job? | Hee!
|Perhaps it was a natural byproduct of his feline DNA and there was nothing to be done about it.
At the time, he hadn't even considered that everyone else might have the same problem.| Woah. Had never even thought about something as simple as this. Well done.
Hmm, families being monitored. This is turning even more interesting.
Awww. He jokes! *squishes Alec*
SO..more? :D
Author's Response: Definitely more soon! I love knowing the things you like are the things that most interest me about the story too, that different outlook Alec, particularly, brings to the situation. Thanks for taking the time to let me know! Makes me feel I'm on the right track!
Date: 24 Jul 2010 12:30 PM Title: Chapter 1
I could probably tell you that you had my attention before I started reading and I wouldn't be lying, but you truly had me hooked the moment Alec and Max met at the hospital.
The setup is great. The banter/character plays between Alec and Max are wonderful. Loved the littlereferences like 'you sound like my brother' and 'practically grew up together' :P Great stuffs.
I am so looking forward to continuing this!
Author's Response: I'm so glad you're enjoying it! For me, the whole point of writing Max and Alec is to see how they react to each other in different situations, so I'm glad it's working for you! I value your opinion highly, so thanks so much for the feedback!!
Date: 24 Jul 2010 12:01 PM Title: Chapter 1
Dude! Congrats. I've always liked your stories, but I can see you're using that "description" stuff everyone talks about here. Well done. It seriously adds to your stories :).
|So in theory, he was aware that a wife's role could range from shared responsibility and property consolidation to decorative trinket and event planner. Much like the surrogates at Manticore, they also provided a much needed home to future offspring, fulfilling an apparent biological imperative of the species. None of these things appealed to 494 in respect to his own relationship with Rachel. He had no property to share, business to consolidate or events to plan and procreation of any kind was forbidden by Manticore and dangerous enough to kill Rachel. However, legally, a marriage in effect fused the decision making process between people, leaving the strongest of will to dominate the partnership. | This is so chillingly scary. Beautiful way of showing how different they are. How foreign the world is to them.
|"What do you think, Rachel?" he asked softly. "Am I an 'Alec'?" | Awww. *hugs poor Alec* Lovely phrase, just a few words, and they convey so much.
I loved how smart Alec was with the van thing. And how awesomely Max reacted to it.
More adventure. Off to read.
Author's Response: "Dude! Congrats. I've always liked your stories, but I can see you're using that "description" stuff everyone talks about here. Well done. It seriously adds to your stories :)."
THANK YOU!! You noticed!! YAYYYYY! It is super gratifying to know someone, like yourself, who has read my stuff in the past, can see the change because that "description stuff" definitely didn't come programed into my DNA, it's work. I'm so glad you see an improvement!! Means so much to me. *hugs you*