Very nice. Unexpected switch of character there, but your writing is strong enough to smooth the abrupt change and before long I couldn't even remember there had been someone else first - in a good way! :P

Loving this line - She’d known when she planned out telling him the truth that he would argue with her, so she’d spent the morning mentally preparing herself to stand her ground.

Just perfect!!

Also - no longer hope, but desperation Very powerful even though I don't really care for M/L. Sniffles...

Really enjoying this. Can't wait to see where you take it...

Author's Response:

Thank you so much for reviewing.  I'm glad you thought that the writing was able to carry the jump from Alec's perspective to Max's.  I knew it would be a little disjointed when I had the idea, so I tried to at least keep some of the same themes going thru the first two chapters - starting out talking about the rain, moving into a flashback, ending with them both being pissy and getting drunk. 

And I understand what you mean about not caring about M/L; I don't really either.  I've always thought that to write a convincing break up scene, though, you have to lace it with a bit of the underlying substance of the relationship.  Otherwise it just seems contrived to me.  So, I'm sorry that you have to slog through a little M/L, and I hope you'll find the ending worth it.

Thanks again for reviewing, and especially for providing actual feedback on the writing - it's very helpful.