Date: 23 Oct 2008 11:10 AM Title: Entwined
What a sad (yet hopeful) little ficlet! I can almost hear Logan telling Max, "We just need some time to remember how to be together again."It would have been a good argument if it were only a matter of reacquainting themselves with dormant feelings and almost forgotten intimacy. But of course, it was much more than that and things, feelings and expectations had changed.
I felt for Max because it's never easy when your ealize that something you've wanted or thought you wanted for so long is no longer what you need or even hoped it would be. A matter of 'here one minute, gone the next' and not having noticed - that musta been a shocker.
And lastly, I loved your hopeful Alec who, depsite his own desires and wants, understands that Max needs his strength and friendship first and foremost and that patience is a virtue.
Well done, nicely written. Thank you for sharing!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your detailed review. I enjoyed this first foray in to the world of writing fan fiction, and hope to write more in the future.
[Report This]Date: 14 Oct 2008 11:47 PM Title: Entwined
That was lovely. I liked that you didn't have her jump into his arms randomly, and that he understood what she really needed at that moment. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I've always felt that, with the exception of heat fics, it seemed a bit contrived for Max to go automatically from Logan to Alec without any downtime in between.
Date: 03 Oct 2008 09:17 PM Title: Entwined
Nice...very poetically expressed!
[Report This]Date: 02 Oct 2008 11:44 AM Title: Entwined
That was very good! Loved how you wrote it. We need more please :)
Date: 01 Oct 2008 09:02 PM Title: Entwined
There is a nice depth to this story. I like your observations and analysis of Max and Logan's relationship, especially Max's habit. Your description of hope is an interesting concept, I liked it.
RRaine