Date: 02 Mar 2010 01:18 PM Title: Toward a More Perfect Union
That? Totally awesome. I liked the pace, how it was all regular Alec@Command stuff and just like that, bam! It all stops.
I also completely love that while White has all these plans and actually wants Max to come barging in... that is *exactly* what she does... and totally kicks a$$.
Brilliant. All this preparing, all her powers slowly building and such a nice payoff. It might seem a bit sudden, but I like that it is. Simple, efficient. Max rocks.
And so does Syl. You truly did a wonderful job with her. Terrific character.
And the bit were Alec "brings Max back" is also a really nice touch.
All in all a wonderful ending to a great saga. Thank you, I thoroughly enjoyed it, the stories, the characters, the different plot threads, the style. All of it.
[Report This]Date: 05 Apr 2009 01:10 AM Title: Toward a More Perfect Union
Really imaginative and well written story with great characterizations.
I liked the scene with Alec confronting White in particular. Their conversation and how neither give into the other in anay way, made for very tense reading.
The aftermath in TC of everyone getting back on track slowly after what happened, was well done too.
I merely wish you hadn't killed off White because he's such an interesting oponent and poses not only a threat for the transgenics but also for humanity in general.
Good job!