Date: 06 Jun 2010 08:39 PM Title: Chapter 13
Hey, there. This is a really cool fic you have here. A really interesting 'verse, where Manticore is quite different than what we saw.
You did a great job with the different POVs. I have to admin I do not recall Buffy that closely, so I did not realize who it was until names where named. That said? I really enjoyed it and it is all well self contained as a DA story here. Have you written the sequel already?
I like the variety of emotions you had here and I *loved* your Lydecker.
Thanks for sharing this.
Maia.
Date: 06 Apr 2009 06:22 AM Title: Chapter 13
Cute Story! I love it all!
Author's Response: :) Thanks
Date: 17 Dec 2008 07:54 AM Title: Chapter 13
I read this ages ago, and forgot to review *ducks head in shame*
But it was such a great story, that I couldn't bring myself to NOT review at all, so here:
Very, very, very nice!!! Writing a sequal? *lol*
I don't usually like M/A (mostly b/c I don't like Logan bashing, and the two seem to often go hand in hand) but this one was great!
You didn't quite make me a shipper, but I'm less likely to turn my back when I read M/A =)
Author's Response: Yay, mission accomplished. I wrote this at a time when I couldn't seem to write anything without making fun or bashing Logan. My solution: leave him out alltogether and hope to get back to him when I have calmed down a little. Which I have now I hope. No more bashing for me.
Date: 23 Oct 2008 11:52 AM Title: Chapter 13
I like the different twist to this fic with Manticore not being evil and all, and Max and Alec being happy life long soldiers. I like the way you still kept their character traits, thouhg, and also kept some of the animal instinct aspects of their gene splicing. The way they gradually fell for one another was wonderfully written - not too drawn out, but just enough tension to keep the reader anticipating the next chapter. Bringing the pulse and the familiars in at the end to tie the AU into the show's canon was a fabulous touch. The twist with the potential Buffy crossover was unexpected, but has potential should you ever decide to do a sequel. Overall, I thoroughly enjoyed this fic. Thanks for writing.
[Report This]Date: 09 Dec 2007 01:03 AM Title: Chapter 13
I just love the AU you created, the missions and relationships between commanders and soldiers was really believable.
Max and Alec interaction as parental figures for Tara was amazing from the very tentative beginnings to the last part of trust on both parts... the quote about visits from uncle Donald was great :)
wonderful story, hope to see the sequel in the future
Author's Response:
I am glad you enjoyed it. Lydecker is just one of my favourite characters and I think given just the slightest bit of caring on the part of the Manticore brass, he would have been a father/uncle figure to the transgenics. And it would make more sense than mistreating them. Would have been a short series then, though. :)
And yes, there will eventually be a sequel, or maybe a series of one-shots. Don't know yet. The one that is dancing around my head at the moment is Zack finding out that Max and Alec are technically 'living in sin'. I am sure he would have strong ideas about Alec making an honest woman out of Max, and her reaction to that archaic though would be hilarious.
[Report This]Date: 07 Dec 2007 08:06 AM Title: Chapter 1
Hope you decicde to do a sequel.Is Ben still alive in your AU? What about Jesse from BtVS?Anyway thanks again for telling me about the site.
Happy Writing!
Author's Response:
HI! Welcome to Raising Hell. Thank you for reviewing so promptly for this as well. made my day.
As far as a sequel is concernec, I have a few ideas. Either a series of ficlets to deal with stages of their lives in Sunnydale. And yes, of course Ben is alive, just haven't mentioned him or the other members of his family. Maybe a Christmas special. I have this idea if what Zack will have to say to Alec when he finds out the two of them are pretending to be married.
Jesse is still alive, cause much younger here. However, Tara will turn out to not be quite as young as everybody thinks she is, malnutrition will do that for a kid. She will still be several years younger than them, but no more than four. And the Scoobies will be in their early teens. So no Buffy, but happily Jesse is still around. I like his character.
Then there is the 'intergrating Sunnydale into the Post-Pulse world' thing.
And you know what I should hate you for prompting all these ideas. This was supposed to rest while I thought about other things. Darn.
Aw, well, guess I suppose that means: Watch this space. :)
[Report This]Date: 17 Nov 2007 03:47 AM Title: Chapter 11
hey really enjoyed this story the alternet universe a little hard to see manticore that way because of all the other storys are so dead against it. but it could have been like that if kanagement was different. cant wait till the next installment :-)
Date: 10 Oct 2007 01:34 AM Title: Chapter 7
Is there going to be anymore to this?
[Report This]Date: 18 Sep 2007 12:26 PM Title: Chapter 7
Well, damn! The Pulse hit! Sheesh. Must say, though, that this screws up my idea of timelines and whatnot. I'm a little confused, but enjoyed it just the same.
Date: 18 Sep 2007 10:33 AM Title: Chapter 6
Dude, that's some heavy stuff. Gives a nice spin (ok, nice isn't exactly the best word, is it?) on the Lucy/Max back story and explains Tara's quiet and reserve. Well done.
Please, Fee, c'n I have so'more?
Author's Response:
You sound like Oliver Twist, so should I make like the poorhouse master and scream: MORE? You want MORE? And then chase you up and down the aisle with the cane?
Just kidding.
And yes it is very heavy, but I wanted on the one hand to explain why she doesn't like guns and why she couldn't leave Tara behind. Not wouldn't, but simply couldn't.
And keep your eye on this spot. Updating right now.
[Report This]Date: 16 Sep 2007 08:05 PM Title: Chapter 4
Oh, boy! Alec did it again! Loving the presence of mind to slow and pull over. Good boy! But then again, he's the best so duh :D
Now I get to pace the room waiting for news of Alec. *shakes finger at Feebo* You love tormenting me! You just met me - that can't be fair!!!
Author's Response:
Ah, ah, ah, technically I have known of you for a lot longer, courtesy of the NWP. You just didn't know me. :)
And it is never too early to start tormenting somebody. Or should I mention cleavers and pliers?
As promised I will update right now and then get to typing the end.
[Report This]Date: 16 Sep 2007 01:54 PM Title: Chapter 3
Okay, so I take it back. I don't hate you. I can't hate you. I won't hate you. I FRIKKIN LOVE YOU!
First of all, thanks for updating so quick :D Thumb twiddling? Not my favourite passtime. And the knuckles and joints get cranky and then I get cranky... yeah.
Second, the stars? Hee! I'll give you a constallation all your own if you continue to provide the goods :D I'll name it...Accipe Hoc! (as in, the Latin, 'take that!' haha dude, I RULE!) With the power of the stars on your side, you will be inFEEnsible! (Yes, I know I'm being unbelievably corny. It's a side effect of being Shay. You get used to it :P)
Okay, so the rescue went a bit quicker than I'd expected, but it was still good stuff. The shared feelings they're both suppressing made me wanna strangle them both. Get out, get home, get laid. But nooooooooo. There's gotta be angst and denial and repressed emotions. It wouldn't be MA otherwise.
And you had me asking the questions! Good writing if you made me ask the questions. (meant to tell you rocking writing last time, but duh, it was kinda understood, right? Right?) So now you've got me asking the question - who's the kid, why'd she hide, what happened to her mommy? How are they gonna get out with a kid in tow and what're they gonna do with her once they DO get out? Oh! And what's gonna happen to the dipshits Alec decked? Cuz I wanna be part of the team that goes to whoop ass! And somebody save Susie! Lecherous, nasty men. *shudders violently*
So, yeah. You're not evil cuz you have the story finished. You've only been awarded Half-Evil Temptress for making me wait :D
Hugs!
Shay
ps. MORE STARS FOR YOUR CONSTALLATION!
Author's Response:
Okay, so one after the other.
1. So what you are saying in the not so sub sub-text is that I should get in gear and post the rest, ja?
2. Hmm, the girl. Well originally this had way more author's notes on it. The crossover is with Buffy. Might have forgotten to click that when I posted this here first. Not used to all the format yet. Right, so x-over with Buffy (very mild), which if you know the characters there makes it a lot easier to decide who the little girl is and what happened to her mother.
3. The rescue isn't over yet, is it? Lips zipped now on that count.
4. And once they do get out, one of the definitive events of the DA verse is going to take place.
5. And I have been demoted to Half-evil temptress? Like the diet coke of evil?
6. Hugs right back. Have pinned the stars up with the others.
7. Oh and before I forget, sadly the dipsticks are out of the picture, although they are kinda dumb enough to deserve their own spin-off. 'Memoirs of two criminal morons'
[Report This]Date: 16 Sep 2007 01:10 PM Title: Chapter 2
I think I'm supposed to hate you. I know there was some authority figure in my life who made me swear not to read any more unfinished stories because I'd never finish anything I have to do. Now look what you've done! You've made me lie to myelf, betray my principles and break my own rules. I KNOW I'm supposed to hate you!
But I can't.
Damn you! :P
So here's the deal. I'm hooked. Completely and utterly hooked. I love Manticore stories, I have always liked mystery and intrique and sci-fi, and damn if you haven't got a bit of everything I enjoy here! Alec in top form, Deck being the way I love him - a soldier and a man who seems to truly care for his kids, a whassappenin', whodunnit and huh-whaaaah situation...
Great visuals. I'm picturing the place and the people we've encountered so far and actually SEEING them. I love that. Yeah, I enjoy my imagination and what it can cook up given only the barest hint of detail, but you've painted it better than I could have imagined, so thank ye! *sigh* Now I have to sit and twiddle my thumbs, crack my gum and bounce my knee waiting for an update.
Have I mentioned that I should hate you!?
Author's Response:
Would it help if I tell you that this is finished? I have eleven chapters finished. (around 21000 words) and the last two written out longhand waiting to be typed. That is the part that causes delays, cause I am lazy with the typing. Should hire somebody to do it for me, my stories would be online much faster.
And go ahead and hate me, cause that is the BEST review I have ever gotten. Thank you so much. Had me blushing like a mad person.
And just as a reward I will post the next chapter right away, too. You gave me stars. Nobody ever gave me stars. :)