Date: 31 Oct 2008 12:43 PM Title: Epilogue: Report
"Tick, tick, tick asshole."
"Hey 494, I'm running out of ways to say stole."
"511 worked to expand our relationship with the Canadian Military."
I love your writing; you have the best lines. The whole mission series was great. You've done an amazing job providing an in depth look into the development of 494 and 511 both as individual characters and their relationship. The appearance of Zane was a nice little twist, that I totally didn't see coming. I was a little disappointed that he decided to high tail it out of there rather than help his fellow transgens out, but I guess I can understand that when you've done nothing but run your whole life that's just your automatic reaction. I would be interested to see a future fic where Zane makes his way to Terminal City and Max figures out that he and Alec knew each other before. The fallout from that would be interesting to read.
As always, thanks for writing.
[Report This]Date: 24 Nov 2007 08:40 AM Title: Brief
This story works like long, slow, teasing sex. The tension builds and builds while the characters are forced to wait, until you're ready to scream with frustration. When they finally get to act, it's orgasmically satisfying. I practically chortled with glee through every one of 511's action snippets.
Somewhere in the midst of all the waiting, I fell in love with 529; I suppose it must have been during one of his brief stints of conciousness.
Oh, the snarking! The battle critiquing! The overturned table! The tank! The spyplay-skulldudgery-backstabbiness of it all! The "aquisition" of so many things, at every opportunity!
I love the clear example of 494's tit-for-tat strategy for winning allies. The trust, carefully measured against tiny clues, then doled out in such a way as to provoke just the right amount of help, just when needed.
Poor guy, though: continually plagued by the cage and the Andy in their many and varied forms.