Date: 03 Sep 2007 10:05 PM Title: Chapter 6
Holy mackeral you gave me a fright. It was a dream. Thank heaven. You walk such a fine tightrope with my head here. This is way outside the scope of what I usually read. I stay away from dark or death fic, who needs the emotion taxing? But you tempted me with the Alec/Ben/Max and I'm still here. The moments of clarity and tenderness he has toward his siblings stop me from giving up on him. As you wrote he loves Alec, and his bitterness wouldn't even exist if Alec was with any other girl.
Date: 03 Sep 2007 10:02 PM Title: Chapter 5
At least he's blown off a little steam. Is Jinx a transgenic perhaps?
Date: 03 Sep 2007 10:02 PM Title: Chapter 4
Takes determination to survive reading a chapter like that, the talent needed to write it... hrm talent doesn't seem to really cover it. I think residing in your mind would give me a meltdown. Dark chaotic brilliance. :P Max and Alec seriously need to get their own place before something bad happens.
Date: 03 Sep 2007 09:55 PM Title: Chapter 3
You reveal his decent into evil a little more each chapter. I started out feeling sorry for him but now I'm afraid for him. Afraid of the inevitable if he continues the path he's on. It's going to hit Max the hardest when she learns the extent of his actions. You've gotten into the calculating criminal mind so well it's chilling.
Date: 03 Sep 2007 09:54 PM Title: Chapter 2
I'm so glad that I pictured some of the X5s finding good foster parents. What happened to Ben, no wonder he's so unstable. To have your innocent faith and trust abused in the most horrific way undoubtedly leaves you scarred for life. Only someone really special can help heal and save you from falling into a pit of self-destruction. It's a shame that I think he's already too far gone. Unless someone superior to him can beat him down enough to get through the dark ego that has taken over. Whatever happened to Marianne? I like to think that Ben spared her even though she either was oblivious to his pain or perhaps she even was abused herself? She seemed like a really caring character.
Date: 03 Sep 2007 09:52 PM Title: Chapter 1
Wow you didn't wait long to reveal the darkness lurking in his soul. Part of me wishes you'd given us more of a chance to see the sweet Ben. The Ben, Max and Zack remember. I loved the reason you gave for his kills too. He marks them with his signature to prove his skill, to prove his worth as a leader. Chillingly he doesn't realize that what makes Zack and Zane leaders is not just their skill but their sense of responsibility. Really Ben's scope is himself and Max. Although you did reveal that he's beginning to question ability to cope with a mantle of leadership anyway. Love the setting and the characterizations so far. Logan and Zack on 'buddy' terms. It's all cute and nice, just means we're in for a harder fall. Setting us up, I see.